Saturday, December 6, 2008
Speech #3 - Impromptu Speech Critique
Post your self-critique to the Elevator Speeches here. Please include in your post two suggestions for improvement (one content and one delivery). Also, include two comments on strength. I am expecting supporting details with each suggestion/comment. The depth of the suggestions and comments will be taken into consideration when grading this post. This post is due by December 15.
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I think overall in this class this was my best speech. I am very outgoing but noticed when I'm getting graded on the way I talk it and present myself it kind of scares me and causes me to become shy and awkward. This speech I think I did well on because I did not have to prepare for it and it was a little more natural and flowed well. I think my strengths were, that the general idea of a intern talking to the Fashion Editor was good and I spoke clear. I liked my intro. and the fact that I kept asking questions and was not going to leave without his number.My weaknesses that needed improvement were, I didn't sell myself I gave praise to him but didn't credit myself as a good candidate for his assistant. Also my non-verbal communication was bad, it could have been a lot warmer and I should have smiled more. Now that this class has ended I noticed my flaws and what I should perfect and also what I have that's unique and innovative. I really enjoyed it and I am a communications major so it was very beneficial! Goodbye Prof. M it was a pleasure...
I'm the type of person that does well when the speech has a certain topic that could be researched. I do very well with research, which you can see with my past speeches. However, on this speech I did not do as well as my other speeches. The reasoning for this is because I am a shy person and I get very nervous if I don't have any notes with me, so it could remind me what I really wanted to say; which is something I need to work on. One improvement I would make is to practice more with an audience when making a speech, so I have more confidence, causing my words to come out naturally. I need to make pauses when I speak so my words sound better. For this speech I should have included praises so I would have had a better chance of getting hired. A couple strengths I had is that I gave specific details, for example, when I spoke about my internship with PriceWater House and how I gave them a profit of $30,000. Another strength of mine was that I approached the other person in a formal manner, which is good for workforce. Overall, I think I need more confidence in myself which makes speeches flow better.
Have a nice holiday!
I like to be creative and different from what I think everyone else will talk about; thats why I came up with the topic of a "Cute boy I wanted to date." I feel I did good on my presentation because even though it wasn't in a professional manor I still used all of the techniques we needed to use. What I liked was that I was very persistant with what my goal was. I explained how I noticed him and how he truly impresses me (gave him praise). I might have come off a bit pushy or creepy. =x I also could have transitioned leading to the dating part a little bit better as the professor said (that was a good point). My ending was okay, I could have used another way to follow up. This was my type of speech because it isn't rehearsed, and gave me a chance to use a bit of acting skills. I learned so much from this class. Now I know why Kean has this as a requirement. Everyone can learn and use this communications class in their everyday life!
Thank you Prof. McManimon.
Happy Holidays everyone.
My Impromptu was not delivered as fluid as i planned while practicing. I mixed up some phrasing that a professor could take offense to if I worded it that way. I had practiced how to say it, but when I actually delivered the part "internships teach so much more than anything taught in a class" it did not sound to flattering toward a professor which I did not intend it to be spoken that way. I forgot to praise as much as I should have, I praised a little bit, but barely noticeably or a strong complement. In all the speeches I have given in class, it is always clear that my anxiety and nervousness is present and is very hard for me to suppress even for something like the Impromptu which should have been more spontaneous and fluid than a memorization/research speech.
I did learn a lot of what I should be doing when presenting a speech in this class, and hopefully I will be able to get better at using the different techniques and different forms of communication the more I am able to practice. Public speaking has always been one of my weaknesses, but I feel a little better about it now than I have before taking this class.
I think I did fairly well on the impromptu speech. The first suggestion for improvement would be the ending of the speech. I should have been more direct in that I was going to find a way to contact/keep in touch with Paula Sheer (the designer) and not rely on her to contact me. Secondly, I could have had more eye contact during the speech. This would have made me appear more confident and sincere. The times I was looking away I believe were when I was thinking about what I was going to say or trying to find the right word. My overall delivery was good and I was commented on my speech being the most real, or authentic in the class.
Overall, I believe this speech was my weakest. Why? Because the fact that I didn’t do research, prepare a presentation and memorize my material, threw me off guard. Yes we do find ourselves in impromptu scenarios all the time, but this was different than if it were any random friend of mine. The two areas of improvement that I have would definitely have to be not asking for my contact’s available time for an interview and the best time to set one up. I guess that because I was nervous, my partner asked me if I wanted to meet with him, and didn’t give me that chance to ask him myself. Another content area of improvement that I have was when my partner asked me what about the billboard I liked. When my partner asked me the question, it threw me off a bit. Yes, it is an impromptu speech and I should have been expecting questions, but I stuttered while I tried to come up with an answer, and at that I gave a poor answer with insufficient detail. An area of improvement with delivery was that I was taking steps back and my eyes wandered when I was asked a question by my partner. I shouldn’t have wandered with my eyes while I pondered for an answer. But I do believe my greatest strength with this and my previous two speeches was definitely me smiling constantly because that not only shows interest but shows I’m friendly.
This class was a help not only in conducting a speech but a huge help in doing effective research. I learned a lot through our textbook and with the flaws I had in presenting. I will work on them and try to be a presenter for my future classes. Thank you very much Prof McManimon I wish you and your family Happy Holidays.
-Cindy
Overall, I feel that this was my weakest speech. I had a clear understanding of what I was going to speak on, who was the speech directed, and how I was going to get the listener on my side. Since I was about the sixth group to present I sort of changed my speech around with the suggestions Prof McManimon gave, and once I got up in front of the class I kind of blanked out, and started mixing the suggestions with what I originally had planned. I could have worked on praising more, and going more in depth with it. I should have gone into the new techniques, and explained them more, as oppose to me saying “you created a lot of new techniques which makes it easier for anyone to get the topic taught”. As for the closing, this is the part where I got nervous and mixed my original plans, with some of the Prof suggestions. I went up there with a changed closing to sort of demand a next meeting, and once I got to the ending I just went back to my original of saying “I hope to meet with you!” Beside that I feel all right with the speech. I know I could have delivered it better, but we do make mistakes. This class was a unique one to say the least, I mean what other class do you have a 30 second FINAL in. Thank you Professor McManimon, and Happy Holidays everyone.
For my third and final speech in this class, I feel that i could've done better. I feel as though my nervousness from not having anything to look onto caused me to speed through my impromptu speech faster than I would've liked. I also realize, as the professor pointed out, that I should have added more detail when mentioning that I am good at adapting to other cultures and learning as much as I can. Adding a story or an example to back up this statement probably would have had more effectiveness in my speech. Overall, I think knowing that I had nothing prepared and no research to back me up was what sent my nerves over the edge.
However, after experiencing what it is to give an impromptu speech, I definitely feel that this was a very useful exercise. If I continue to practice the methods taught to me in this class, I'm sure I will be more successful and more prepared in both a professional setting and everyday life.
Enjoy the Holidays!
My elevator speech was by far my worse speech the whole semester. My delivery was awful. I was extermley distracted by out of school issues, and let them interfer with my speech. Next time I give a speech like this, I need to blank out everything that is going on in my mind and focus only on what I planned on saying ahead of time. The content of this speech overall I feel the content of my speech was there I just needed to include more details on what I was trying to convince the person I was speaking with.
One strength that I showed in my speech was introducing myself and informing the other person on who I was and what it was that I was looking for from them. I was upfront and got straight to the point. I also think that my second strength was I used names of people who informed me about the job opportunity and why the job was open. Overall in my speech, I knew that I was prepared for it, however I became distracted and was not able to remember what I had planned on saying. I believe that I a decent speaker and can connect with my audience, however this speech was not my best. Professor M. thank you for a nice semester and helping me become a better public speaker. Enjoy the Holidays.
I thought the Impromptu speech was my best speech of the three. I came up with a very unique situation in which I am an agent for a high profile player and am trying to work for a contract extension I felt my strengths of this speech were the way I gave praise and how I held my nerves throughout the speech. At the beginning of the speech, I introduced my self and gave detailed praise to “Jerry Reese” about his good eye for potential players in the draft and his calm demeanor in handling the Plaxico Burress situation. I also did a good job in selling “my client”, Brandon Jacobs, by talking about his accomplishments and what he has done in the community. Throughout the speech, I was able to keep my nerves in check for most of the speech and I was able to make good eye contact. Also, I felt that the conversation had a good flow and was very spontaneous. I did feel that there were a few flaws in the speech also. I wasn’t able to end the speech well. I didn’t “seal the deal” by summarize the speech well and going over more details of setting up a meeting in the future. I also didn’t sound forceful enough while I was talking during the speech, so many people my not give my client the extension because of it.
Happy Holidays everyone!!!
I think that my impromptu speech was my weakest one out all of them. I think that because the fact that we didn’t have a power point to refer to or like cards, it sucked. I can improve on many areas like one thing is I HAVE TO SLOW DOWN; I have this horrible habit of talking really fast and slurring my words. Most of the time people have no idea what I’m saying because I spoke to fast. Another improvement I could have made on that speech was giving my Professor (Vanessa) a chance to talk I asked him all these questions but I didn’t let him respond. Sorry Prof : [. When I practiced it, it wasn’t that bad but I guess the whole being nervous got to me. One thing I was good at was my greeting I introduced myself correctly and also gave a good example of what I did and what I wanted. Overall this class has helped me a lot in being a better speaker thank you Prof. M. I enjoyed having all of you as classmates and hopefully I will see you all around campus :D.
Enjoy your holidays and month off <3
ON my speech, I think I did my best so far. My strengths were my approach. I wasn't scared and I was energetic and to the point. Also, my compliment was a very strong point. I used something which was an idea the person came up with and expanded on it. My weakness was I didn't talk about my credentials. I said that I would be good for the job but didn't say how. Also I didn't have a good ending impression. I said, "ok, bye" instead of saying something like I look forward to speaking to you in the future. Overall, I think my positives out-weighed my negatives by far. Me being as eager, energetic and smiling how much I did said that I wanted the position, I just have to work on explaining how I could help my "objective" in that position. This class has taught me a lot about speech deliveries and preparations for a great speech. It taught me that you can always prepare and speeches range from full preparation to the spur of the moment. I think you professor for helping me in my future as an educator.
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