Wednesday, October 15, 2008
Critiques for the Informative Speech (speech #1)
Post your speech critiques here. Be sure to include the topic of their speech and details that comment on three strengths and three needed improvements. You should give your speech partner some suggestions on how to make the improvements in your post. I am looking for details in this blog and not just a listing of ideas. It is your job in posting to illustrate that you understand what makes for an effective speech presentation from the point of view of the listener (receiver). Please use only the person's first name.
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Presenter: Michall A.
Subject: Hybrid Vehicles
Strengths:
Overall, good presentation. You clearly stated your topic, thesis statement, and your sources were all correctly cited. The information was thorough and supporting material was well researched.
Your explanation of the dichotomy between gasoline versus hybrid vehicles was explained well.
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Areas of Improvement:
For next time, try interacting with your audience a little more. Be personable and have a conversation. Also, you could have explained in better detail the different parts of a hybrid vehicle rather than simply reading them off of the PowerPoint. Lastly, while your notes were understandable, they were also very hard to read. Choose a lighter color for the text or use a faded background image.
Presenter: Kim
Subject: China
Strenghts: In the begining of your presenation you clearly stated your topic, which is a great way to start off so that your audience knows exactly what you will be speaking about. During the presentation you maintained eye contact with your audience, and made sure you did not look at just one person; but you made sure to form eye contact with pretty much the whole class. You were able to state your sources and back up the information that you were speaking about.
Improvments:
In the beginning of your presentation you looked back at the computer screen instead of your notes or even the power point presentation. However, about halfway through you did stop which made it alot easier to focus on your presentation. So next time my suggestion would be to make sure you focus on glancing at notecards. The second improvement you should work on for your next speech, is talking with your hands. Throughout the whole presentation you spoke with them, and I know it is a hard habit to break, I do it myself. And finally, watch using uhm, it makes you sound like you do not know what to say next and you clearly did know because you had a great amount of information and your presentation was very informative. Overall, you had a great job!
Cindy
I will start with the 3 improvements first and then move onto the 3 strengths. One improvement that you could have made was working on your introduction, in your introduction you didn’t include a preview statement or a thesis statement and also your attention grabber was kind of confusing, so next time just have that cleared up so we know what’s going on. Another thing about the introduction was that you didn’t include a works citied page so just have that for reference in the next speech. Also while making your presentation you didn’t follow the format we were supposed to, we had to use the 6 by 6 method which means 6 lines per page and 6 words per line, only so that we don’t get confused and it doesn’t get to complicated, but I understand you weren’t here when we discussed that so just have it for next time. In addition to that you also had to list your source on the bottom of each slide, which you didn’t have. The last thing I want to mention is when presenting your speech you didn’t use any transitions you needed a lot more connectives in there, the topics didn’t seem to connect with each other it felt as if you were all over the place.
The strengths which you showed outweighed your weaknesses so don’t worry. You had an amazing presentation for being the first speaker up, I mean I know how nervous and scary that could be but you did a great job on it. Your strength was mainly in your delivery you had a loud energetic voice and also you kept great eye contact throughout the whole presentation. Also you have very good research conducted; you knew what you were talking about so it wasn’t just blabbing going on up there. And lastly you conducted an interview with someone, you didn’t mention the name, but the fact that you did one shows how prepared you were so good job.
Presenter: Monica
Subject: Travelocity
Strengths:
Your speech was very thorough. Everything from you thesis, to your sources were clearly stated. The information presented was great, and straightforward. Your speaking tone was also great. You knew how to control your voice well enough to get the audience engaged. You also had good delivery, which kept my interest in your topic.
Areas if Improvement:
In the beginning of you speech I really did not see a strong attention grabber. The Travelocity clip seemed more like a plain introduction, rather than something that would grab the audiences attention well enough to listen; it seemed more of a clip for the audience to take note of. The 6x6 rule was clearly not followed in many of your slides. Finally your sources seemed to come straight from Travelocity, and nothing more. Next time try searching around for various sources to take into account the different opinions people share.
Overall your speech was great, you clearly understood you purpose, and went up to prove your knowledge of the topic. Your voice was engaging, and kept my interest. The high point of your speech was when you compared Travelocity to other travel companies. Great job Monica.
Presenter - Vanessa
Subject - Google Docs
Strengths- First let me say, you did a very good presentation, considering that you were so confused with you topic. Your strengths were (1) your voice, you projected it well. (2) you had good credibility and (3) you had a great attention grabber. "The new doc in town" and the picture was an excellent idea.
Areas of Improvement- (1) Your layout was dark. The black font on the purple background was so hard to see. (2) Your lack of practice with your presentation was distracting; especially when everyone was shouting directions at you. And (3) I was hoping you'd show us how to use it and not only rely on what its used for.
Overall, you did a good job. It was our first speech, so we all have strenghts and weaknesses to work on.
Presenter: Andrew L.
Subject: California Gold Rush
Strengths:
You had a strong attention grabber and you kept it simple so no one was confused. The way you organized the presentation was also very good. it felt like you were telling as story which kept the interest high. You also showed that you had great understanding of your topic by the many details you included.
Areas of Improvement:
The color of you front was to light for the color of your background. I would go with either a darker font or a darker background if you want to use one of those colors. Also the power point was not properly sited, next time just put the source under each thing on the power point. The final thing was you did not verbally say your source, which did not establish good creditability. Over all your presentation was very well done and very interesting.
Presenter : Andrew B
Subject: Sarah Palin
Strengths:
You tried to be really informative on the topic. You had a good point about her son in the military, and the child with down syndrome. The New facts were interesting.
Improvements:
Althought it was informative, Im not sure if the information was correct. The intro could have been more of an attention grabber lets say with statistics or with those interesting facts in the beggining. You also didn't use the correct source format.
Lets keep trying! It was just the first informative speech. Everyone had their faults. Overall good job!
Presenter: Frankie
Subject: The Amazing Race
Strengths:
Your first strength was your ability to explain how the reality show worked and the rules of the game. I have never seen the show before, but by the end of your presentation, I had a good idea of how game unravels. Your next strength was your introduction. It was catchy and pulled me in right away. Lastly, I really enjoyed how you integrated an interview of one of the show’s former contestants into your presentation in order to better explain the concept of the show. It was entertaining and offered a different perspective other than the viewer’s.
Improvements:
One weakness was that at the very beginning of your presentation, you looked at the screen a lot. Another weakness I noticed was that there were times when you spoke and all I saw on the screen was a blank slide. This was a little confusing for me at times and made me lose my train of thought. Lastly, I feel like your conclusion could’ve been a lot stronger.
Overall, I feel that you did an amazing job for your first speech, and you did a great job researching and presenting your information to the class for the first time. I can’t wait to hear your next speech!
Presenter: Kaitlyn
Subject: Myspace Music
For your strengths I thought you had a good attention grabber to attract the audience to pay attention. You were also able to effectively speak in conversational tone and was able to relate to what people already know about myspace and expand on it uses, specifically the music end of it. Another strength I thought that you had really good information about the use of myspace for musicians.
On the weakness side of your speech, you did not seem to verbally cite, the only verbal I can recall is a Rolling Stone Magazine article towards the end. The rest of the information could have used some better credibility to back it up, maybe an interview of a musician that got their start from Myspace music. One minor weakness you had was probably do to nervousness, when you paused too long and looked down, maybe to remind yourself where you were in not cards or something. It was brief but somewhat noticable.
Overall, I think you did a fantastic job. As a viewer I felt more informed on the uses and effects of Myspace Music. Great job.
Presenter: Rima
Topic: Stadium
The very first thing you want to do is get the attention of your audience. You had a great attention grabber, but you told everyone your topic before you had everyone’s attention. It was clear that you knew your information because you had no note cards and you didn’t look at the screen for help. While speaking, you made great contact and clearly projected your voice. One thing you need to remember is to pause and take a breath. In the beginning, you were asking questions as your attention getter, but you asked them so fast that you didn’t allow anyone to answer or at least answer to themselves. You also need to keep in mind to cite your information because it let’s us and the teacher know that you didn’t make any of it up. You audience is interested in short and to the point so try to stick with the six by six rule. In general you had a powerful speech and did a great job relating your topic to your audience’s level.
Presenter:Ashely Wood
Strenghts:
Your speech was good very informative.You knew your info., had a good attention getter, and tried to use your citing in all slides.
Improvements:
Next time you should use better eye contact, and don't be afraid to be voicetrous( if you talk louder then we will be more interested). Also facial expressions use some type of emotion when talking.
Presenter: Rajaun
Subject: McCain
Strengths:
Your presentation was very good. Your photos were great. Your eye contact was fantastic, you barely looked at your index cards or powerpoint. Your vocals were very good, you had a lot of variety in your tones.
Improvements:
Overall your speech was very good, however, you had a few flaws. Next time you should include more transitional words in your speech. Next, even though you had a conclusion, I did not realize it was the end of your speech. Lastly, you should try to keep your power point on the 6x6 rule, because it may hurt your grade. The 6x6 rule makes the power point easier to look at.
Presenter: Ayana
Topic: Chris Gardner
Strengths: Your speech was very well done. You began your speech with a very good quote as your attention getter. You cited all your work properly and had a good work cited page. Throughout your speech, you made good eye contact and had a good tone and verbalization as you spoke.
Improvements: Most of your problems came from your power point. On your slides, you didn't follow the 6x6 format and you could have added more pictures to your slides to help the audience connect with Chris Gardner. The colors you chose for your font and background blend together and made then difficult to read. You also need to verbal cite more during your speech. But for the most part, you did very well on your speech and I felt I learned a lot about a man who had to struggle and work his way to be successful.
Presenter: Theresa
Strengths:
To start off with you had a good attention getter which made the audience want to know about your subject from the start. You were very well informed about your subject which made the audience know that you did your research. During the presentation you maintained very good eye contact.
Improvements:
One thing that you should try to improve on for the next is citing, did not cite your information throughout your speech which broke down the credibility a little. You also moved around a lot which showed that you were nervous. During your speech when you got nerverous and did not know what transition words to use, you used the word uhm.
Presenter: Kaitlyn
Subject: Myspace Music
Strengths: You seemed to know what you were talking about and i liked that you made it personal. This was a very relatable speech to our age demographic. You were very conversational also.
Improvements: You relied on the notecards towards the beginning, but i think that had more to do with nervousness than preparedness. Also, you did not back up your credibility.
Overall, I was drawn in by your speech and i thought that for a first speech it was good.
Good Job!
Presenter: Monica
Subject: Travelocity
Strengths: It was a very good presentation for a seemingly unexciting topic. You found ways to make it interesting with good ideas, eye contact, and a contagious voice. You seemed excited to present. You kept your audience in mind while delivering your speech.
Areas for Improvement: It was a good first speech however the preview needed to be added. The sources needed to be cited aloud and there has to be more sources than travelocity.com The 6 by 6 rule also needs to be used.
Overall it was a good presentation that kept my attention the entire time. The gnome was definitely an attention getter and humor was involved which was a good technique.
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